How to write a thesis statement for essay Part II

Thesis Statement

Readers should also need to read on in order to agree with your analysis you we’ll come back to it I’m going to show you a proficient run next John Boyne uses the techniques of dramatic irony foreshadowing and revealing personal details very efficiently to make you feel empathy for the characters throughout the whole book why is that proficient and the one before was partially proficient think about it.

Let’s look at one that’s advanced John Boyne allows his readers to empathize with the characters in the boy in the Striped Pajamas through a skillful use of dramatic irony foreshadowing and his careful development of complex characters let’s go back to the partially proficient one and see if you can feel the difference the author uses dramatic irony foreshadowing and revealing personal details to make you feel empathy it had its complete.

That’s why it’s not below proficient it is a complete thesis but what are we lacking here what could we do a better job at how could this be solid look at the difference when we move to this one what does this one have that this one didn’t and then we go to the advanced the difference between the advanced and the proficient is subtle its communicating the same ideas it’s in the subtlety of the wording.

The smoothness of the wording and one thing I want you to notice is in both the partially proficient and the proficient look at this phrase revealing personal details yes that’s the phrase we used when we were discussing it in our novel study discussions but when we go to write this piece of writing this analytical essay this phrase revealing personal details that maybe that’s not the smoothest way to say it maybe there’s other ways you can communicate the same idea but in a way that flows more smoothly in your entire thesis statement you see how I changed it a little bit in the advanced one I changed it to his careful development of complex characters now when I go into that body paragraph I’ll discuss that he reveals personal and private details about the characters in order to make them complex and develop them fully but in my thesis it just flowed better to describe it that way because my reader might not understand the reader of my essay might not understand what I mean by revealing personal and private details okay I hope this helped you understand how to write a strong thesis.